The Voice Acting.
Man, you have GOT to work on your VO. It's boring to listen to, the two characters sound so disconnected from the subject material, and everything is delivered at an extremely low growl. When he says "Let me out, you motherfucker" he should be YELLING it, rattling the bars in anger, not pitching it to himself in a silenced tone!
As a final side note, why is the bottom half of the house so pleasant and the top half not so much? It reminds me of a building in the middle of construction that never got finished, not a horror-filled nightmare. Pick an aesthetic style and stick to it, especially if it's supposed to be the same house and there's no real disconnect between the two parts.